I am a Year 7 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 9 and my teacher is Roya. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Nice work on this activity. I really like the imagery and expressive language in your poem. And I like that you have included the Haiku that you’ve taken inspiration from. “...water harshly dripping from above” is probably my favorite line. Like heavy rain pounding down.
Poetry doesn’t actually have rules and I think this is really good but I reckon for an extra challenge you could try working on this one again or come up with a completely new one and work to that 5,7,5 syllable limitation and see what creativity comes out of it.
I’ll be really excited to see if you do, See you later in the comments.
Hi Victoria, I really like your haiku poem it is so creative and cool I like the middle sentence Scariness covers the bright blue sky because it creates mood and atmosphere like the mood is scary. I hope you have a great holidays from: Luisapeta
Hey Victoria,
ReplyDeleteNice work on this activity. I really like the imagery and expressive language in your poem. And I like that you have included the Haiku that you’ve taken inspiration from. “...water harshly dripping from above” is probably my favorite line. Like heavy rain pounding down.
Poetry doesn’t actually have rules and I think this is really good but I reckon for an extra challenge you could try working on this one again or come up with a completely new one and work to that 5,7,5 syllable limitation and see what creativity comes out of it.
I’ll be really excited to see if you do,
See you later in the comments.
Daniel
Hi Victoria,
ReplyDeleteI really like your haiku poem it is so creative and cool I like the middle sentence Scariness covers the bright blue sky because it creates mood and atmosphere like the mood is scary. I hope you have a great holidays
from: Luisapeta